Website poor traffic and sales-Help

[rob24hrs]

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This is not an attempt to generate traffic or sales!
Can you please have a look at my website (1st one)

www.2minutes2.com

its built using the "James Martell" method got a Google PR of 4 but very little traffic and poor sales.

I suspect the sales copy is poor and would like some comments feed back. Many thanks for your time.

Robert Lee

[webado]

Ok, I'm not an expert at all. But here are just a few things that occur to me when I visit the main page of your site.

#1. Check spelling and grammar. Whopper of a mistake in the most prominent spot: So your looking for a way .... should be So you're looking for a way . Check your sentences, they should be complete and grammatically correct. Likewise for the punctuation.


Hypnosis Whilst it's tempting to think of a mysterious figure in a cloak swinging a pocket watch backwards and forwards in an attempt to control you . Modern hypnosis is far removed from this image.......

This is not a complete sentence or else that period should really be a comma and the next part should not be capitalized.

#2. Strive for more uniformity of fonts and font sizes. Pick a good font and stick with it. Right now it's kind of busy. The font sizes are all over the place.

#3. Spend some time organizing the main page. Set a bit of a foundation to the message. What's my motivation to use hypnosis? Is it as an alternative to other methods? So maybe you can talk about other ways, their possible drawbacks and then introduce the notion of hypnosis as yet another choice, perhaps THE best choice, at least in some circumstances, yadda, yadda, yadda.

#4. Instead of using MAIN MENU as a headline you can perhaps find another way to indicate that this is what it is. A question may work, like: Want to find out more?

#5. And just what is NLP? Am I just supposed to know it or is this where I find out about it?

Now I, the visitor, want to feel that I am visiting a site which is the ultimate authority on this subject. So I have to find useful information, with claims that are supported by examples. You do have other reference links, so that's good, assuming they lead to useful material (I haven't followed them yet).

Good luck developing your site further. It will eventually take just the right shape, but it requires a bit of extra work.

[rob24hrs]

Thanks a lot! Got grammar problems!

I'm converting the entire site over to an seo-website builder format using Andy's package which will take some time. I'll post a message on here when its done.

regards

Robert Lee